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This is my effort for the fifteenth Flash Fiction Month (FFM) prompt and Challenge #7.
The challenge is to write “a story that includes a magical girl and a magnificent bastard. One is to be inverted, and one is to be played straight.” For a full explanation of the challenge, please follow the link above.
Obviously this is too long to be considered a flash fiction (and it is WAY late). What happened is that, once I got writing, the story just took over. It is the best thing in the world for a writer when that happens, so I just ran with it, not knowing until the very end where this was going to take me. So, though I’ve not strictly followed the FFM rules, I don’t care! This is what things like FFM and all the other writing months are for: to get you writing, and let something catch you and and then make you chase it joyously.
Read all about FFM here.
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Update: I’m delighted that this story won #Elite-Literature's “Lit of the Week” Poll #61.
3012 words not counting Easter Eggs.
Mature
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I usually try not to fav stuff before I add it to the poll, but this was just...breathtaking. Vicious. I started out properly creeped out by Andy and fearing for Cerise, even before she appeared in the narrative. At first, I assumed she would be the proper 'virgin' character of the typical horror story, only to learn that she was just as dangerous and terrifying (in ways) as Andy himself. There are no truly good characters, here.
The use of exact, copyrighted products added something edgy to it, too. (I especially love "Pentax® 40mm SMC-XW Series 2" Wide Angle Eyepiece with 70 Degree Field of View"--it's so over the top exact). And the easter egg phrases are a perfect addition to the meta-ness of the whole piece.
The use of exact, copyrighted products added something edgy to it, too. (I especially love "Pentax® 40mm SMC-XW Series 2" Wide Angle Eyepiece with 70 Degree Field of View"--it's so over the top exact). And the easter egg phrases are a perfect addition to the meta-ness of the whole piece.