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    For the :iconwriterart: 2 sentence story contest described here.

    Donald Barthelme, whom I met, is turning over in his grave.

    I know that the recommendation for the contest was against having any overly long sentences. In this case, however, the whole point of this story is how long and breathless the first sentence is.

    It’s sort of like this: we all know towers aren’t supposed to lean. The whole point of The Leaning Tower of Pisa, on the other hand, is that it is leaning, kind of like this

    My tower is leaning!



    Update: I Won First Place!
    I just found out. Check out the announcement of all the winners here.


    2nd Update: DailyLitDeviations (DLD) Award!

    “A Thing Now” was recognized with a :icondailylitdeviations: for May 22, 2012. See the article here.


    3rd Update: Daily Deviation (DD)!

    “A Thing Now” has received a Daily Deviation feature for February 23, 2013. This is my second DD. Holy cow, I’m stoked! Huge thanks to the wonderful =LadyofGaerdon for suggesting it and ^neurotype for featuring it.



    630 words, not counting the Easter eggs.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-02-23
A Thing Now: A Two-Sentence Story by =tonepainter is a "tongue-in-cheek" (suggester's words) exploration of a style bordering on stream-of-consciousness. ( Suggested by LadyofGaerdon and Featured by neurotype )
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Rookanga1945 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist
I feel a bit stingy saying just this, but that was awesome!
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much; you've made my day!
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Rookanga1945 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist
You're welcome! I'm happy whenever I can make someone happy.
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myperson54 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
Wow. I actually had to reread this a few times. I suppose knowing the movie references helps (The original Star Wars were the good ones!), but I fount it OK to follow through the ones I didn't know. The only part I was turned around was right before he started explaining the "you don't even have pals" part, where there are three contained sentences. (Or so I counted.) Amazing piece, though!
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! I really appreciate it.

(And the films were fun to include...some of the movie references are serious, and some are meant to be humorous. I would never expect anyone to do this, but anyone who took the time to watch all of the films referenced in this piece would, I promise, have a lot of fun and get to see some really great—and some really off-the-wall—cinematic masterpieces.)
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myperson54 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013
Of course. I'm in media arts and am an aspiring writer, so it's always nice to see something as well-written as this. For instance, I now know how rambling sentences can be good, in some ways. And I might just watch those movies. I might. :D
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And in case you didn't notice.... just as many DVDs have "Easter Eggs," surprise bits of content squirreled away among their menus, so, too, does this story (like all my lit deviations) have a huge number of hidden Easter Eggs. Hover your cursor here and there above the words and you just might find a few. There are tons....and some of them are quite significant. For example, one might just find the best/most important line of each of the movies referenced. One might. :D
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uhhh...how did I miss this one before?
Love it, man. :clap:

Congrats on the DD!!! :la:
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Holy shit. So how the heck do you do alt text?
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You want the magician to give away his secrets??? :lol:

(I just sent you a note explaining how.)
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Hmmm. No.





(thanks!)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   Writer
:+fav:
Fantastic run-on sentence, one that kept me chasing it and remembering all the movies listed as "old" and what a great reply, too, and thank you and congratulations (a bit late) on the DD!
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I really appreciate it. Old movies that are long forgotten by most people are definitely a guilty pleasure of mine. :D
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   Writer
:) :iconwelcomeplz: It seems I watch old movies whenever I watch a movie.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD, darling friend! :love:
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thank you! :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
Surely, good sir! :love:
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GMYumil Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Now you're thinking outside the box!
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013   Writer
Congrats on the feature ! Your verbosity is very entertaining.
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. If I ever have to read this live, I'll be cursing my verbosity...
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Cabres Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
This is just bafflingly odd and incredibly silly. Truthfully, I've had more than a handful of conversations play out in that fashion. Even stranger is that I was the first sentence a good bit more than the second sentence. Still, shockingly brilliant work. Though, *hikes up my professor smarty pants* you made one error that should be adjusted. The term Baton Warmer shouldn't have the "doubled apostrophe" for the quote within a quote use. The single apostrophe works in place of the "doubled," there. So, that is the only snafu. Great work, my friend.
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I really appreciate it. And thanks especially for catching my mistake on the double quote... I don't usually make that one; I guess that's the peril of writing such a long sentence: losing track of little details can be pretty easy.
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Cabres Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
Hey that's the joy of having DA as you're built-in proofreaders. LOL. But, you are definitely welcome for the assistance and the compliment.
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Cabres Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
Hey, that's the joy of having DA as you're built-in proofreaders. LOL. But, you are definitely welcome for the assistance and the compliment/comment.
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Cabres Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
My apology for neglecting to state this:
Congrats on your DDI.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Writer
This. Is brilliant. I love you. Congrats on the DD :D
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. And you are brilliant, and I love you, too! :D:D:D
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :D :huggle: Thanks :heart:
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013   Writer
XD Well done! ... Next challenge - attempting to say the first sentince in one breath XD
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. I'm going to have to take a very deep breath!
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   Writer
Shall I be on standby with oxygen handy?
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes!
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   Writer
I once had a sentince like that (only shorter) and i nearly collapsed by the end of it
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SeaPlume Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student General Artist
This is fantastic! I love the characterization you managed to create through only dialogue (and just 2 sentences). Excessively long sentences that technically aren't run-ons are a personal favorite of mine, so well done!
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks... and thanks especially for recognizing that the sentences aren't run-ons. Some people don't realize that "run on" doesn't mean "long sentence," alas. I take great care in avoiding grammatical mistakes, and I would be mortified if ever did commit a run-on error!

(I actually teach grammar courses at a college...)
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many, many congratulations on the DD! You've scored the hat trick :D
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, my friend! I'm really stoked about this one; it's one of my personal favorites, partly because it's so crazy, and partly because I love old movies.

:D:D:D
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love old films too but I think I probably lean more towards comedies and musicals than you do :D

I've just reread this properly for the first time in ages. (And I've finally looked up "is this a thing now?" to find out what it exactly means ^^" You kids and your slang...) It went over my head before how funny this is ^^ I promise I will stop describing your work as "intimidating" but I'm glad I've stuck with it and not been put off by how flaming intelligent and talented you are :D
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:blushes:
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Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow...

This is really neat! :D
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!!!
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Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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EOSJunkie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Congrats on the DD. first time iv ever encountered such a text, great read :)
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thanks for such a cool comment! You made my day! :D:D
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EOSJunkie Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
wow really. your welcome :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thanks so much! :love:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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