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About Varied / Hobbyist Official Beta Tester Truth, marinerMale/United States Groups :iconthings-not-seen: Things-Not-Seen
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While I like the opening line, I think overall this reads like an early draft of what could end up being a good poem. This isn't fully coherent yet. The hard work you have to do to try to piece anything out of this isn't paid off, and much of the ambiguity isn't from a literary quality, but from lac...

by vespera

This is devastating genius:I have wanted to return – Won't you tuck me in and whisper to me about home, the restitution and the earthy womb? the quiet – O', Sylvia, tell me of the quiet. Consider my soul somewhat in awe and ajitter. You asked for suggestions about enjambment, so here goes: I think t...





The only thing worse than being talked about is not being talked about.

—Oscar Wilde

 

Je suis un parisien

Journal Entry: Fri Nov 13, 2015, 6:24 PM
Tonight I stand in solidarity with all the people of Paris against the horrors of terrorism. For many centuries Paris has endured wars, revolutions, occupations, and all manner of brutality from those who would try to conquer its spirit, and yet it remains perhaps the most inspiring city on the planet. No evil will ever defeat the resilience and grace of the French people. As soon as the attacks began, amidst all the chaos, the people of Paris opened their doors to strangers to provide them safe harbor. With that simple act of courage and charity, Parisians showed the world that the terrorists had already lost. #porteouverte 

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tonepainter
Truth, mariner
Artist | Hobbyist | Varied
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True Grits
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Truth, mariner
Writer. Photographer. 3D Hobbyist.

 
Strangers passing in the street
By chance two separate glances meet
And I am you and what I see is me.
      — Roger Waters, “Echoes

No. Not this pig.
      — Philip Levine, “Animals Are Passing From Our Lives

At worse, one is in motion; and at best,
Reaching no absolute, in which to rest,
One is always nearer by not keeping still.
      — Thom Gunn, “On The Move

These fragments I have shored against my ruins
      — T.S. Eliot, The Waste Land

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
      —John Ashbery, “Some Trees

Easter Eggs:
All of my written pieces have Easter Eggs of a sort.... usually in places where you might need want clues.


























































Interests

What Title Should I Use for My Six Word Story (Currently Called "Wall to Wall") 

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3 deviants said Wall to Wall
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2 deviants said All the Cool Cats Are Doing It
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2 deviants said Shagadelic!
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2 deviants said Pussy Galore
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2 deviants said Meow!
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2 deviants said I Hereby Invoke All Meanings of the Word "Mew"
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1 deviant said Out of the Bag, On to the Shag
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1 deviant said Puddy Cats
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1 deviant said Catachresis
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1 deviant said This whole thing is a childish, dirty joke and I'm never reading your junk again!

Easter Eggs????

…but how would you find them?


Want a clue? Start here.


 

Where Would You Find My Fiction?

And how should you find it?
My fiction belongs in a brown paper bag.

If there is some intersection between “philosophy,” “true crime,” “the noise that flies make in sound-proof rooms,” “shaggy dog stories,” “sci-fi,” and “things Ed Meese wanted to ban—but only after pleasuring himself while reading them,” then that’s the shelf where you’d find my work.

By the way, the FBI has cameras trained on that shelf, where my work sits decidedly alone. Don’t ever pick up one of my books, or else your name and photo will go in a database, and we all know what happens next.

For starters, some pretentious idiot will pull up a blurry shot of you from a bad angle and utter that fearsome incantation of our times:
computer, enhance!

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:iconphantomqueen97:
PhantomQueen97 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2016  New Deviant
Thanks for adding me to your deviantWATCH!
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure...and Happy New Year! 
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:iconphantomqueen97:
PhantomQueen97 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2016  New Deviant
Happy New Year to you as well!
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PhantomQueen97 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2016  New Deviant
Thank you for the Llama Badge!
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Oberon232a Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for the Llama
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure!
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phydeau Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for the :+devwatch:
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure. Your work is amazing.
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